Sunday, February 10, 2013

Scents Of Apple Pie & Fresh Bread #sixsunday #samplesunday


Hi fellow Sunday snippet writers and readers...thanks for stopping by my blog this week!

For this weeks six, I jumped ahead a bit from my last snippet (scroll down my blog's home page to find the previous TWO snippets from this manuscript. Finn has now made the change from seal to human, and, well, the rest kinda speaks for its self. I hope you enjoy. FYI still no submission news to share yet so keep those fingers crossed for me ;)

Snippet is pre-edited, so there may be some boo-boos and no-nos.

SEAL THE DEAL, ISLE OF MAN AND SELKIE bk1 - copyright JoAnne Kenrick, all rights reserved.

Minutes later, he arrived at his parent’s stone cottage. Once a home for the lighthouse keeper, it now served as a modest farmhouse. Inside, he expected to find a pitiful fire in the hearth, not quite crackling, with his mother at the table figuring out some jigsaw puzzle while snuggled in a huge, thick sweater. His father with his feet up, enjoying some comedy show on the old television with a tartan blanket over his knees; a typical scene after a long day hauling arse around the farm. He turned the handle, opened the green door, and inched forward. Rich burgundy colors and scents of apple pie and fresh bread greeted him.

Psst: I'm giving away a copy of HOT WINTER KISS over on Cate Master's blog as a part of her Celebrate Amore event. http://catemasters.blogspot.com/2013/02/day-10-celebrate-amore.html

19 comments:

  1. Oh my gosh, this scene just bursts with color and flavor and awesomeness!!

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  2. Apple pie and fresh bread! Warm and homey!

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  3. I love the setting you've created. Not only have you included lots of rich detail, but it also happens to be someplace I'd love to visit.

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  4. Wow, I could feel his shock when things were so different from his expectations. Who is in that house?

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  5. Well yummy! That made me hungry for apple pie. And now I want to know what's going on in that house. Great six, JoAnne! Can't wait to read more. :)

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  6. Oooh, I'd love coming home to that... :) Fingers crossed on the subs, darlin! xoxo

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  7. What great visuals and...olfactories? Ha ha You did a wonderful job of evoking all the senses.

    ~Joyce Scarbrough

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  8. Love the greeting he gets! Great imagery here!

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  9. The visuals were amazing. I could feel the room and smell the apple pie. Great job. :-)

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  10. Well that sounds a lot better than he was suspecting. Lovely descriptions, both expected and reality.

    One thing - had the construction magically changed too? He was expecting his parents stone cottage, but found a red brick farmhouse. Or am I reading it wrong?

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    1. Nope, you are right. Nicely caught. Thanks for pointing out the boo-boo. I've amended the snippet ;)

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  11. Lots of vivid details to pull the reader in! Nice job!

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  12. I love the homey feeling of seeing his family, and I could totally smell the fresh bread. Good snippet, JoAnne. :)

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  13. I'm thinking it's not his parents that are inside! Looking forward to more--great sample! :)

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  14. Wow. Really strong imagery. Well done! This story if fabulous.

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  15. I love all the color and visual cues you've incorporated into this snippet. Lovely snippet!

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  16. Love all the sensory detail. I can perfectly picture this scene. Just lovely.

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  17. Nice surprise for him, loved the visuals. Of course I'm intrigued why things at home were so different from his expectations. Excellent excerpt!

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